Try to use SHOW not tell sentences to imply how the person is feeling. Think about their facial expression, body language, what they may say and how they may say it.
Friday 3 March 2017
Blogging homework due Friday, 10th March
Your homework this week is to write a paragraph for each picture, telling the tale what has happened to each person to make them react that way.
Try to use SHOW not tell sentences to imply how the person is feeling. Think about their facial expression, body language, what they may say and how they may say it.
Try to use SHOW not tell sentences to imply how the person is feeling. Think about their facial expression, body language, what they may say and how they may say it.
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Jakub
ReplyDeleteparaghraph 1
One day later,Mr Wright marched into the dark,frozen cold hall.Screaming at everyone makeing everyone jump back shudering in their seats.Soon Mr Wright spotted Mike and Liam
talking about school dinners.He got so angry steam came out of his ears.His face turnned as red as the sun.
paraghph 2
Suddenly Hamish Bigmore heard Mr Wright screaming "I'm leaveing now" screamed Mr Wright Hamish was so shocked his jaw dropped and his eyes bulged and he froze and said "How can this happen" Screamed Hamish Bigmore.While everyone was cheering"hooray" cheered the chilldren.
The angry man.
ReplyDeleteHe might turn as red as a tomato.
When he speaks his teeth grit.
Steam comes out ofor his ears.
The shocked boy.
He has bulging eyes.
His eyes are wide open.
He is as still as a statue.
Arjun Sandhu
A man was just walking down the road to his apartment when suddenly ... people were starting to demolish it with cranes and bulldozers.
ReplyDeleteHis hair flew up and stood there as still as a statue. He was furious! He shouted raved and screamed as steam came out of his ears.
He stomped his feet that made a sound as loud as a gorilla. The man's teeth and fists clenched tight as sticky as superglue.
A boy was on his way to school and when he got there it was closed and there was no one there, not even a teacher.
He gasped as he heard that there was no school that day. He was very confused and scratched his head. His eyes buldged
and his hair suddenly became all curly. The boy dropped all his items and staired at the sign as things came out of his bag.
Boy,when the boy came to school the classrooms and play ground disapeard the only thing left was the ...teachers.
ReplyDeleteAngry teacher , children were running all a cross the field but there not allowed to.
The mans ears burst with anger! Steam flew out of his ears. He was stomping louder than ever heavily in range. He closed his fist like a box man. His teeth chattered in anger. His eyes made a narrow look on his face. Three bits of hair stood up. He felt anger boiling in his body.
ReplyDeleteHis hair,eyes covered most of his face. The boy only showed two of his teeth. His mouth dropped in surprise. His hands were about to touch his tiny feet. The boy felt very strange.
Mr.Pat was watching TV.He was watching business news. He saw his business being LAST!!!!!!! He was FURIOUS.He clenched his teeth in anger.Steam came out of his ears.He stomped. He wanted to PUNCH the TV.
ReplyDeletePete was going to school.It took 10 mins to go to school.Some children were waiting for Pete.When they went inside.Their jaws dropped.There were NO TEACHERS. They were shocked.
Mr Wright is very angry because someone sneaked into his office and damaged his precious trophy collection. Seeing this Mr Wright was so angry that his face turned red with steam coming out of his ears like a boiling saucepan. Clenching his fists and teeth he yelled as loud as a thunderstorm.
ReplyDeleteHamish Bigmore was shocked because he found out about spiders in his bedroom. Hamish is terrified of spiders. Seeing one on the corner of his bed, he froze. His jaws dropped, eyes widened and stood still. In a squeaky little voice he yelled, "HELP!"
The Annoyed Man:
ReplyDeleteAn angry office man just lost his keys so he can't get into his house. He felt steam coming out of his ears and he is grinding his teeth. His teeth are as white as a white rose. The man clenched his fist as hard as a pumice rock being smashed. He got so angry he accidentally kicked down a bin.
Scared Sam
There’s a scared boy called Sam and he is scared that something is following him. It’s just like a
Shadow creeping up on him to see how scared he is. His eyes bulged and his hands froze like they were frost bitten. His hair stood up and his hair on his patella stood up as if they were solders getting ready for the Queen. He was so scared he wet his pants.
The headteacher was so angry at Sam that his face was as red as beetroot and it looked like steam was pouring out of his ears.He clenched his fist as he yelled at Sam!He was the meanest,most rudest headteacher in the world!"You filthy child!You shouldn't be hear in school.You should be on the streets that's were you ought to be!"he barked.
ReplyDeleteSam was petrified in fear.He knew that the day of judgment was up-on him.He stood them trying to run away.......But he couldn't!His legs were glued to the floor.He longed to duck underneath and un-glue his feet but he couldn't!He knew that if he did he would be dead.It was the scariest day ever.He stood there staring at the cyclops that was towering above him.He was paralyzed in fear.His eyes bulged as the headteacher drew out a putt[wich is a cannon ball] and hit him on the head.SMASH!
Picture 1
ReplyDeleteMr Lander got out of his car and waved his fists in the air, ranting and raving. He was about to go to a very special meeting, but his car had broken down! Steam was flying out of his ears. ‘Why is this broken down, it’s a new car!’ he yelled. ‘I’ll have to fix it or get a taxi!’ Mr Lander could always get furious! Even children were scared.
Picture 2
Chris was stuck to the spot, his jaw dropped, his eyes bulged and he gasped loudly. Whilst he was playing with his new ball, Nasty Nick kicked the ball so high it hit a tree hard. “Oh No!” shouted Chris. “Now my ball is dirty and scuffed!” as he ran over to it in tears.
I feel bad for Chris,the best show not tell ever.
DeletePicture 1
ReplyDeleteThe business man seems to be very angry. He's body is tensed up to
the limit ,looks like he wants to hit something, for sure with
rapid heart rate and steam coming out of his ears. Clenched fists,
grinning teeth, frowning look and wrinkled forehead describe the man's feelings.
Picture 2
The boy seems to be shocked as if he seen a ghost that
left him speechless, without any other expression rather than a
dropped jaw, big opened staring eyes and obviously surprised
of something.
Mega great show not tell.
DeleteFirst picture:
ReplyDeleteMr Wright went out to get his most loved car. When he got there he quickly went into his shiny, sparkly, amazing red and blue striped dashing BMW. Mr Wright turned the key and suddenly ...... It wasn't working! Mr Wright gasped. He got out of his car and slammed the car door shut!
Second picture:
Early in the morning, a kid called Zack went down into his kitchen for breakfast. He had been waiting to go to school in his dreams. He greeted his mum and saw some apple slices to eat. Zack saw his mum reading a letter. He looked when his mum shouted "Your going to SCHOOL!!". Zack's jaw dropped and he was experiencing mixed emotions.
Jakub
DeleteGreat show not ten Arveer.
The Man
ReplyDeleteThe angry man's ears were with steam.In his head he could feel somebody punching his eyebrows.The man really freaked out so his hair went up immediately.He fisted his hand with anger.The man frowned at everyone because he was fired from his job."Get away from me!"shouted the man feeling a little sad.
The Boy
The shocked boy's mouth dropped down.His hair puffed up curiously.He cried sadly " why am I not allowed in the football team?".
Jakub
DeleteAmazing show not tell,I feal bad for the boy.
Angry face:
ReplyDeleteYesterday, Bob was going to work. When he went to his office, he got some important papers from his boss and he putted it on his desk.
Later, Bob was having his coffee and, accidently, he spilled the coffee on the important papers.
The boss became very angry and he fired bob from work.
Bob got so angry and his ears became red as if hot steam coming out of his ears, he cluched his fists like he wanted to punch someone with anger and his face frownded as he pushed hard on his teeth.
Shocked face :
Yesterday, Tom was going to school, he went to his class and every thing was fine.
At the play time,Tom went outside to play with his friend on the field but every body was shocked from what they have seen. The playground has disappeared. Tom was so surprised. His eyes bulged and his mouth was opened like he was going to eat a whole chicken at one time.
By habib
Realy good show not tell,Great simelies Habib,very shocking secend paraghraph.
DeleteA man came out of his house knocking the door behind him his name was...chaos!
ReplyDeleteWhat had made him so angry? "Why did they have to spray paint my house!" bellowed chaos.His house was in the colour he hate pink but those kids should of messed around with chaos because chaos will seek revenge..
One day a ordinary boy was on his way to school.He arrived at the school and
His jaw dropped he had just found out his teacher was a alien his bag dropped on the floor and. He ran out the school gates screaming like a girl!
super great show not tell,mega good suspence.
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