Literacy Homework due Friday 20th October 2017
Have a look at this boring list poem.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot,
a butterfly,
the sea,
the sky,
a precious stone,
a gift.
How can you improve it? Maybe you could add some exciting adjectives (gargantuan, ferocious) or some powerful verbs (pounced, erupted). You could include some alliteration (the menacing monster was munching his meaty meal) or a simile (its skin was a cold as ice, it crawled like a snail).
Write your own, improved version of the poem. I can't wait to see what you come up with!
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot,
a butterfly,
the sea,
the sky,
a precious stone,
a gift.
How can you improve it? Maybe you could add some exciting adjectives (gargantuan, ferocious) or some powerful verbs (pounced, erupted). You could include some alliteration (the menacing monster was munching his meaty meal) or a simile (its skin was a cold as ice, it crawled like a snail).
Write your own, improved version of the poem. I can't wait to see what you come up with!
1. A big,coulerfull and talking alot parrot
ReplyDelete2. flying butterfly
3. wet and waveing sea
4. the white sky.
5. A shiny presious stone
6. a precious gift
13.10.17
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream gar you might find:
A magnificent, beautiful and amazing jewel.
A slice of cake with a crocodile snapping for a bite.
Hungry, hippo, hopped, happily, home.
It is round and shiny as gold, a treasure that is lost and found.
A brightly coloured parrot squawked repeatedly as it swooped low over the lush rainforest.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful delicate butterfly fluttered daintily over the vibrant blossoming geraniums.
The sea frolicked and foamed wildly making the waves crash to the shore.
The precious sapphire stone glimmered and shone brightly.
An exquisite gift of pure kindness.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA parrot with long and soft feathers.
The butterfly was as colourful as a rainbow.
The sea was glittering like stars.
The sky is as blue as the sea.
A precious and powerful stone.
A special and beautiful gift was wrapped with glitter paper.
If you were the sky Then I'd be the sea and when you shined bright it would reflect me.When you're at rest then I am steady If you wanna get rough I'm always ready.Past closing at the bars if you show me the stairs I'l open right up.
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea colourful, spectacular, squawking and magnificent parrot,
a purple, wonderful, flapping and patterned winged butterfly,
a nice, calm, blue sea with colourful fish swimming around happily,
a blue sky like the sea and white clouds floating around, the sunny sun making it very hot,
a precious, glistening, quadrilateral and 3D straight stone like a cube,
a small, star shaped, shiny, squidgy gift wrapped nicely with ribbon and glitter.
By Elliott
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea beautiful fat blue parrot,
a lovely colourful butterfly,
the mysterious deep blue sea,
the cloud filled sky,
a shiny precious green stone,
a gift fit for a queen.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea parrot as colourful as the rainbow,
a butterfly so beatiful that you can't stare at it,
the sea so ferocious the whole jar rmbles,
the sky so calm it helps you relax,
a precious stone can't be bought,
a gift to help your needs...
Yash- The Sky
ReplyDeleteI was sitting watching in the sky,
I saw beautiful butterflies fly,
The wings looks beautiful
As an angle wings wide in sky,
There I saw a tweeting parrot
Orange like a small carrot,
It looks soft as cotton wool
white as snow very cool,
I wish to grab it quick
Soon it perched on a stick.
It was eating a big green chilli
as thin as a flower lilli,
There I saw an evening dark
I heard a dog's bark,
Soon I went to sleep at night
It was day by that time.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA little, talkative and who keeps on copying parrot.
A beautiful, glorious and gleaming butterfly.
The shimmery, wavy sea.
The blue, light sky.
A precious, glimmering stone.
An outstanding, fantastic gift.
1. The parrot was bright and colour full as a rainbow.
ReplyDelete2. The butterfly was shape love me a star in the sky.
3. The sea was shining bright as the sun.
4. The sky was blue as the seven seas.
5. The precious stone with glittering diamond ore.
6. The gift was mysterious , gift was chill, I put it on the grill.
A beautiful parrot sitting in the sunshine.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful butterfly fluttering in the sky.
The beautiful sea approaching to the distance.
The clear blue sky with black birds singing.
A precious stone stood contrast to the dull limestone.
The carefully wrapped gift lay on the table.
A colorful parrot
ReplyDeleteA beautiful butterfly,
The wavey sea
The gleaming sky
A glamorous precious stone ,
A irreplaceable gift.
Ahmed
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea perfectly pretty parrot,
a boldly beautiful butterfly,
the sensationally superb sea,
the blue and super sky,
a preciously shiny stone,
a gorgeously gleaming gift.
In a blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea proud parrot pecking a pear,
a beautiful butterfly floating like a feather,
the sea tossing and turning like it was raging with anger,
the sky as blue as a bluebell,
a precious stone so shiny that it hurt your eyes,
a gift filled with sugary sweets.
When I turned of the lamp I saw a lamb eathing grass and flowers with amazing happynes.
ReplyDeleteA parot was amazed with injoyment when he saw a delicious banana.
A butterfly was colorfull as the sky.
The sea was bright as a sky.
The sky was shinny as the sea.
The precious stone was invisible gift.
Amelia
ReplyDeleteIn a blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot pouncing across the land
a butterfly flying among the sky
a clear crystallized sea
with precious stones
that are all what you can see
a gift from a nature
that's all you can find
in a blue dream jar.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea talkative parrot swinging on the tree,
a brilliant blue butterfly fluttering around the flower.
The gigantic sea howled like a fiery dragon.
The sky was as colourful as a rainbow at dawn.
As rare as a precious stone,
OR
As smooth as polished precious stone,
a great grand gift as heavy as a huge house.
---Kavya
In the blue dream jar, you might find:
ReplyDeleteA nice beautiful little blue butterfly flying all around with joy
A Blue magical sea with high and low waves.
A bright blue sky up so high with a smiling sun.
A blue talkative parrot.
A Blue Precious stone inside a beautiful blue gift box
A colourful noisy and beautiful parrot is flying very high.
ReplyDeleteA blue butterfly was eating bright flowers for its lunch.
The wavy sea is making big waves.
The cloudy sky is making thunderous lighting.
A precious delicate stone is standing still in the bushes.
A gorgeous gift has been passed around.
Jasmeet
Wow! We really enjoyed reading these out in class. We were all really impressed with the amazing adjectives, powerful verbs, awesome alliteration and sensational similes! Well done!
ReplyDelete1] A gleaming sparkling coulourfull porrot is just zooming aiiong the way.
ReplyDelete2] A shiny beautifull butterfly is just flying higher and higher.
3] A shiny colored blue sea is so glitrey whene you see it.
4] A thunder sky with lighting crushing on the road along the way.
5] A glass stone that is very delicate, that no one is allowed to touch it.
6] A the nought was neetly tied to the queens gift.
A cool and talking parrot
ReplyDeleteA butterfly flying in the sky
The sea and it colourful waves
A precious iloumonouse stone from the heavens
A gift from the holy gods