Have a look at this boring list poem.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot,
a butterfly,
the sea,
the sky,
a precious stone,
a gift.
How can you improve it? Maybe you could add some exciting adjectives (gargantuan, ferocious) or some powerful verbs (pounced, erupted). You could include some alliteration (the menacing monster was munching his meaty meal) or a simile (its skin was a cold as ice, it crawled like a snail).
Write your own, improved version of the poem. I can't wait to see what you come up with!
The parrot was as colourful as a rainbow.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful butterfly was spreading it's blue wings and flying.
The sea was sparkling like glitter.
The sky was as bright as the sun.
The precious stone was as bright as the moon.
And finally there was a mysterious box covered with blue ribbons. By Arjun
Some lovely alliteration, Arjun! I like your similes too.
Deletein the gray nightmare jar you can find
ReplyDeleteA silver cloud moving to the water.
A fast fog moving through the world
A horrid witch flying on a broom stick
in the green dream jar you can find
A filed of tall grass swaying in the wind.
A gentle leaf being thrown in the wind.
A prickly cactus growing in the desart.
in the blue dream jar you can find
A sapphire sea crashing on the shore.
A slippery squid sliding through the water.
A bright parrot fling like a star.
I can imagine the slippery squid sliding through the water! Great imagery.
DeleteIn the red dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea shiny apple rolling across a table,
an amazing butterfly swooshing across in the jungle and
a super rare ruby dropped by a miner
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a cyan sapphire bouncing across the stone in a cave,
the aquatic ocean slashing through the wind,
the beautiful sky as bright as a tiny and amazing spark and
a playful dolphin splashing and dancing in the incredible and brilliant ocean.
I love the sound of your blue dream jar. You have used some interesting verbs.
DeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteAn astronomical parrot was swooping by
A beautiful butterfly who was very shy
On the enormous blue sea waves crashing high
The spotty sky flying high
A sparkly precious stone waiting to touch by
A gargantic gift staring at a blue eyed boy
I love your adjectives! Is 'gargantic' the correct word?
DeleteIn the white dream jar you could find:
ReplyDeletea little puppy in the snow,
a white teleporting lab coat,
a potion as white as snow,
a white pokemon,
a white sea horse.
I like your simile, Sujeeth! Which words could you use instead of 'white?'
DeleteIn a Blue Dream jar you might find;
ReplyDeletea beautiful blue bird balancing on a twig,
a brilliant butterfly fluttering in the wind,
the splendid greenish,blue ocean transforming into waves,
the awesome sky glittering in the wind,
a precious stone shining like mad
and a cute little gift standing beside you'r door!
Lovely! Great alliteration,
DeleteIn a yellow dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA legendary lemur leaping lazily like a lizard,
A charming chick playing with its mother,
A dazzling dynamic dandelion determined to germinate,
The shimmering sun glimmering as bright as can be,
A shining sunflower waiting patiently to be pollinated,
A cheetah running rapidly for its prey,
A lion chasing a cheetah cub,
A snake as still as a stone, glimpsing its prey,
A beautiful bumble bee generating pollen,
A cute cuddly caterpillar in its cocoon ready to transfigure into a tiger swallow butterfly,
A lemon shark watching dolphin’s swim swiftly in the serene sea,
A crested canary chirping charmingly,
A graceful grain transforming into scintillating sweetcorn,
A luxurious lemon being bought,
And fantastic figs being eaten.
What a fantastic dream jar!
DeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find
ReplyDeletea parrot shining in the epic sun,
and the sea that is floating in the beautiful wave,
and a precious stone that is spackling in the beach.
An 'epic' poem!
DeleteIn the blue jar you can find: A ferocious parrot loving life,The glittering sea shining from the sun,The bluest sky that is shining,A precious stone that looks like a heart,A gift that is as blue as the sky.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds beautiful! I can imagine the glittering sea.
DeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea turquoise parrot intelligent as a human,
a enormous butterfly that flies as fast as lightening,
a calm sea glittering in the sun,
a red sky as red as planet Mars,
a glittering precious stone the same worth as a blue diamond,
a golden gift box full of Lego.
I'm sure you would like the golden gift box full of Lego, Fabian! Can you think of a different word for 'red?'
DeleteIn the white dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea little lamb trotting across the ginormous field and
a mighty mammal taking the dramatic animals to a better place to
live
In the red dream jar you might find:
a shiny buffed apple rolling across a table,
a magical treasure chest that shines,gives you whatever you want and never runs out of items,
an amazing butterfly swooshing through the thick and very rough jungle and
a super rare ruby dropped by a silly miner.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a cyan sapphire bouncing in an enormous cave,
the aquatic ocean slashing through the wind and
a playful dolphin dancing in the ocean.
In the purple dream jar you might find:
a crazy sword that does whatever you want,
an incredible enchanted bow that pokes whoever you want it to poke and
a teleportation wizard that can teleport you to wherever you want.
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DeleteSome wonderful adjectives have helped you to create magical images.
Deletein the blue dream jar you might find a
ReplyDeletelovely parrot fling in the beautiful sky
a colorful butterfly leaping on a green leaf
a blue sea crashing in the rocks
a turquoise sky shining bright
a precious stone rolling in the wind
a blue gift waiting to be opened.
Good use of the adjective-noun-verb sentence structure that we practised.
DeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA pretty parrot showing off her wings,
A sapphire butterfly dancing through the sky,
The shimmering sea waving its water up and down,
The breeze in the trees coming from the sky soaring higher and higher,
A precious stone in a box waiting to be opened and
A gift given to a child to be opened.
What wonderful images you have created! I like the alliteration.
DeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find
ReplyDeletea parrot shining in the beautiful sun,
and the sea glittering lick the sun,
and the precious stone that is floating in the sea
A beautiful dream jar!
DeleteIn the blue dream jar, you might find:
ReplyDelete- A beautiful, colourful, loudly speaking parrot looking for a yummy food in the big jungle.
- A colourful, joyful, small butterfly flying among the red tulip in the garden.
-The big blue sea waving strongly and making loud sounds.
- the clear blue sky decorated by big white clouds that look like floating snow decorated by golden lines from the sun shine.
-A shiny ring with a glamourous precious diamond stone as a gift for my precious loving mum.
-A gift wrapped in shiny silver paper for me on my 8th birthday.
by habib
Great adjectives, Habib. I wonder what might be inside the shiny, silver paper!
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ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you can find a:
ReplyDeletecheeky parrot flying and copying all the words that I say like a copy cat
a glorious, gorgeous and beautiful butterfly hovering above a buttercup
the gleaming, shimmering and shiny sea making vast, giant and stupendous waves.
The periwinkle sky standing amazingly in the air, getting darker and darker,
a sparkling sapphire protecting the gigantic universe, a glittery,twinkly and colourful wrapping paper for my eighth birthday.
awesome Nihira!
Deleteszymon
ReplyDeletein the blue dream jar you meay find.
a colorful sky moving to water
a bluefall sea dominating the sand
a slipery squid sliding in the sea
In a white dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA gentle snowflake fluttering in the wind,
An unbelievable unicorn galloping in the breeze,
A fluffy little cloud flying in the sea of blue air,
An awesome coral reef with a crowd of coral friends,
An adorable little dolphin swimming in the big blue,
A cute baby polar bear paddling in the sea,
A beautiful lily floating in the pond!
By Misbah
ipshita 29 september 2016 at 7:10
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
A pesky parrot flying across the sky,
a beautiful butterfly fluttering from flower to flower,
the calm sea crashing the sea shells onto the golden sand,
the aqua sky carrying the white clouds,
a shiny precious stone as bright as the sun,
a perfect gift been opened.
In the mysterious dream jar you could find a:
ReplyDeleteParrot flapping its shiny, colourful and magical wings.
You could hear:
The butterflies peacefully seeking love and beauty for its own perfection.
you could see:
The rough waves crashing against the shore on sea.
You could imagine:
The bright blue sky brightening your day and also, feeling free.
You could feel a:
Rare glittery but hard object on your ring which brings the expense and quality of such mystical rock.
You could give a:
Heart-welcoming gift of warmth and food for the most in need.
By Yagmur
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA pesky parrot pecking your arm
A beautiful butterfly looking for food
The sapphire sea warm as milk
A precious stone as grey as delicate cloud
A gorgeous gift that has emerald in it
In a blue dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA glistening parrot flapping its wings
A butterfly with wings colorful as a peacock
A sea as blue as a clear sky
A stone as precious as a Ruby
A shiny emerald found in a cave
A monster big as a palace
A parrot speaking English.