Homework due Friday,
16th March 2018
We
have been looking at ways to show how a character is feeling by using a range of
vocabulary to imply (hint at) their feelings without explicitly saying the
adjective.
For
example,
The boy was feeling sad.
The boy’s lip trembled as tears
dripped down his cheek.
How do
you think these characters are feeling?
Can
you think of at least 5 different sentences to show how each
character is feeling?
1. Eyebrows pulled down together.
ReplyDelete2. Fist tight.
3. Mouth open wide.
4. Screamed in a threatening voice.
5. Staring eye lids.
6. Furrowed nose.
1. Jumped and cheered.
2. Shouted hooray.
3. Hands raising up.
4. Lips were wide open on the face.
5. A big smile appearing.
Great show not tell! Next time, try to write in full sentences.
DeleteMahin - 09.03.18
ReplyDeleteBoy
1. The boys’ arms were raised cheering.
2. The boy smiled like a Cheshire cat.
3. The boys’ eyes lit up and twinkled.
4. The corners of the boys’ mouth turned up.
5. The boy was standing tall and proud.
Girl
1. The girl had a glowering gaze.
2. The girls’ face trembled.
3. The girls’ face reddened.
4. The girls’ fists clenched with rage.
5. The girl had dull eyes.
I love your show not tell. Especially the simile: like a Cheshire cat!
DeleteCheck the position of your apostrophe- there is only one boy and one girl.
eg, The girl's face trembled.
Miss Davies,
DeleteMy understanding, the apostrophe is supposed to be after the 's' because if you did the apostrophe before the 's', it would mean the girl is...
That would not make sense!
Please can you explain?
Thank you.
Hi Mahin,
DeleteWe use apostrophes for two reasons. One reason is to show contraction, when it is used to replace a letter or letters. In this case, you would write, 'The girl's tired' instead of the 'The girl is tired.'
The second reason is to show possession. If you are talking about one girl and her cat, you would write, 'The girl's cat'. If you are talking about lots of girls and their cat, you would write, 'The girls' cat.'
Show not tell anger.
ReplyDelete"NO!" The lady yelled loudly.
She clenched her fists tightly and tried to stay calm.
The lady took a deep breath and counted to ten.
She felt her cheeks burning and her nostrils began to flare.
She rubbed her red eyes and hoped that no one was looking.
Show not tell happiness
"Hooray!" all the children cheered.
"I've done it." he squealed in delight.
His cheeks hurt as he was smiling so much.
He jumped up and raised his arms in celebration.
"Get in!" the class triumphantly roared.
Fabulous use of show not tell to describe feelings.
DeleteCharacter 1:
ReplyDeleteHer nose wrinkled in anger.
She was red in the face.
She yelled in rage.
She shouted in anger.
She frowned angrily.
She punched her hand into her fist.
Character 2:
He smiled happily.
He had a grin on his face.
He cheered with his arms in the air.
He cheered "Yay!" joyfully.
He jumped up and down.
You have shown me how they were feeling. Well done.
Delete
ReplyDeleteBOY
1. He waved his hands in the air.
2. He said ’hooray’ happily.
3. He smiled.
4. His eyebrows were raised.
5. He jumped up and down.
GIRL
1. Her eyebrows were lowered.
2. She was shaking her fists.
3. She opened her mouth in angriness.
4. She said violently ‘How dare you?’
5. Her heart started pumping fast.
Great show not tell. Remember that we always need punctuation inside our speech marks.
Delete1 .The boy cheered as a smile grew on his face.
ReplyDelete2. His eyes lit up.
3. He was dancing in delight.
4. He jumped up and down like a rabbit.
5. The boy fist pumped everyone he saw.
1. She screamed as loud as a hyena.
2. She was breathing heavily and she was red in the face.
3. She clenched her fist.
4. Her furrowed brow deepened.
5. Steam came from her nose.
By Elliott
Great use of show not tell.
DeleteGirl
ReplyDelete1. Frowned her eyebrows.
2. Opened her mouth.
3. Raised her fists in the air.
4. She screamed angrily "how dare you!"
5. Stretched her lips
Boy:
1. Waved his hands in excitement.
2. He smiled.
3. He raised his eyebrows in happiness.
4. He shouted "Hooray!"
5. His eyes widened.
Well done! Remember that the start of speech should have a capital letter as it is the start of the sentence that the person spoke.
DeleteAmelia
ReplyDeleteThe boy was feeling sad.
The boy's lip's shivered as tears were dripping down his chin.
The women was angry.
The women face was twisted as her mouth was wide open.
The boy was happy.
The boy was jumping up and down with a smile on his face.
The girl was excited.
The girl's eye's were wide open.
The boy was scared.
The boy went stiff.
Great show not tell. Remember that we don't need apostrophes to create plurals.
Deleteeg, one eye, two eyes
The girl has scrunched up her eyebrows to her eyes. The boy doesn't have a angry. He has a smiley face and looks like he has won something. The girl has opened her mouth really widely. The boy has a big smile on his face. The girl has squeezed her hands so much! His hands are reaching for the stars.
ReplyDeleteHis mouth isn't as much wide as the girl. The boy is cheering. The girl didn't had her eyes wide open
Jasmeet
Some good show not tell. What else do you do with your face and body when you are angry?
DeleteThe women eyebrows are thums up.
ReplyDeleteThe women cheeks are puting up.
The women to tighten fist.
The women mouth is open.
The boy mouth is open.
The boy had smiling face.
The boy had hands are up.
The boy eyes is open.
Well done Dominika!!
DeleteThe girl was screaming!
ReplyDeleteThe girl's mouth was opened wide.
The girl made a fist with her hands.
The girl's jaw dropped.
The boy was cheering.
The boy was jumping.
The boy was smiling.
Good show not tell, Krithik.
Deletethe is hapyppy I'm joy
ReplyDeletehe women is angry
the boy is like a kangaroo
Please could you try writing these again in full sentences, Aahil?
DeleteBoy:
ReplyDeleteHe cheered with joy.
The boy jumped up and down.
His hands waved in the air.
His mouth is wide open with a big smile.
His eyebrows raised with happiness.
Girl:
Her mouth opened wide.
Her eyebrows curved in rage.
Her eyes narrowed down.
Her fists were clenched.
She wrinkled her nose.
By Arush.
Anger
ReplyDeleteShe stormed out of the room with steam coming out of her ears.
She was shaking her fists in fury.
She was screaming like a maniac.
Her forehead was crumpled up in rage.
Her eyebrows were pulled together in fury.
Happiness
He jeered in happiness.
He shot his hands in the air in joy.
He smiled in celebration.
“Yay” he shouted in glee.
He waved his hands around in cheerfulness.